Awesome descriptions Hiero! Your description of the little blue penguin being the king of the forest floor created a great image of how he looked and felt. The description of the other bird being like a spider really made it seem scary to the penguin. Very well done at creating that imagery and those feelings. In your next story just make sure you aren't putting capital letters where they don't need to be. Capital letters are just for the beginning of sentences and for proper names of things like "Hiero" or "New Zealand". Overall, your description of the penguin's movements and attitude was excellent. Keep up the good work! Ka pai!
Awesome descriptions Hiero! Your description of the little blue penguin being the king of the forest floor created a great image of how he looked and felt. The description of the other bird being like a spider really made it seem scary to the penguin. Very well done at creating that imagery and those feelings. In your next story just make sure you aren't putting capital letters where they don't need to be. Capital letters are just for the beginning of sentences and for proper names of things like "Hiero" or "New Zealand". Overall, your description of the penguin's movements and attitude was excellent. Keep up the good work! Ka pai!
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